soudclick of Here I am Lord

[millrat]

I hope this works. I'm trying to post a recorded version of here i am lord. if it works, i think it is the fingerpicked version. it's a very amateur recording but you'll get the idea of the song anyways. i have another version of it strummed.
let me know if the link works.


http://www.soundclick.com/player/bandradio_player.cfm?bandid=704283&q=hi

[Lazy Bee]

Dang, the link takes me to Soundclicks front page or something like that, but not your tune. Looking forward to hearing it millrat.

[millrat]

Sorry about that. I was afraid that might happen. I'm not great at this soundclick thing yet.
I'll try again


http://soundclick.com/share?songid=6503954

[millrat]

Just bumping it; I got the soundclick to work

[tcanova]

I really liked this, there was some hesitation in some of the deliveries of the lines but that could be just a syncapation adjustment with the fingerpicking.
You mention that you have another version with strumming, which, I think would sound really good, but what about doing the verses with the fingerpicking and then strumming on the "Here I am Lord..." chorus? To my ear I wanted more of a rise and elongation musically in the chorus, like
Here I am Lord Standing before You".

Sorry, posting on the net it is kind of hard to get across what I am trying to say, but you have some strong lines and I just thought the chorus section could kick in and raise a bit and lengthen in delivery. I hope you know what I am trying to say?:confuse:

Either way, I think it is a beautiful song and have listened to it a number of times. :)

[Peeb]

I really liked this, there was some hesitation in some of the deliveries of the lines but that could be just a syncapation adjustment with the fingerpicking.
You mention that you have another version with strumming, which, I think would sound really good, but what about doing the verses with the fingerpicking and then strumming on the "Here I am Lord..." chorus? To my ear I wanted more of a rise and elongation musically in the chorus, like
Here I am Lord Standing before You".

Sorry, posting on the net it is kind of hard to get across what I am trying to say, but you have some strong lines and I just thought the chorus section could kick in and raise a bit and lengthen in delivery. I hope you know what I am trying to say?:confuse:

Either way, I think it is a beautiful song and have listened to it a number of times. :)
good suggestions, tony! I agree. Nice work.

[millrat]

Thanks for listening guys, I appreciate it.
Tony, those are some good suggestions, and I'm gonna tinker around with them and see how it comes out.
The hesitation you hear is just my inexperience, but I'm glad you enjoyed the song.

Rob

[Lazy Bee]

Listening....nice intro! Guitar sounds great. True sounding vocals.

This is a good song. There's a lot to like here for sure.

The message is clear and the emotion shared is in tact. Great job with that.

A couple things... I wonder about the tempo. the message would be more dramatic if it were slowed way down. Some of the phrasing is rushed, especially in the chorus. I do that myself sometimes when I don't want to hang my voice out to twist in the wind. lol It's an easy trap to fall into.

It's such a nice guitar track I could understand you not wanting to change it. You might want to look at an alternative approach though just for fun if nothing else. Slow it down and let those lines breath.


Also, the melody moves linear throughout. Needs a lift to create some melodic separation between verse and chorus.

My 2 cents.

Nice song Millrat.

[BKent]

Nice job, MR. I like the tune!

Have you thought about recording the strummed guitar, then layer in the fingerpicking, and doing the vocals over the finished guitar tracks? Maybe strum the chorus together with two guitars?

Your recorded guitar sound is sweet!

Thanks for sharing that!

[millrat]

Listening....nice intro! Guitar sounds great. True sounding vocals.

This is a good song. There's a lot to like here for sure.

The message is clear and the emotion shared is in tact. Great job with that.

A couple things... I wonder about the tempo. the message would be more dramatic if it were slowed way down. Some of the phrasing is rushed, especially in the chorus. I do that myself sometimes when I don't want to hang my voice out to twist in the wind. lol It's an easy trap to fall into.

It's such a nice guitar track I could understand you not wanting to change it. You might want to look at an alternative approach though just for fun if nothing else. Slow it down and let those lines breath.


Also, the melody moves linear throughout. Needs a lift to create some melodic separation between verse and chorus.

My 2 cents.

Nice song Millrat.
LB, you're right, there is a lot more that could be done with this. The version I have here is just a quick recording of melody and lyrics I heard in my head.
I haven't really worked too much more on it yet. I gave a copy of it to the praise band leader at my church, and he and the bass player have worked it out a little more than what I have. I haven't heard their version of it yet, but they said they haven't changed the layout of the song or anyhting, that they just rocked it out a little. I'm anxious to see what they have done.
I have a friend by the name of Pete Goble. He is a well known bluegrass songwriter, and he sent a copy of the version you heard hear to a fellow by the name of Bradley Walker, who is recording with Rounder Records. Bradley is Produced by Carl Jackson. I haven't heard anything back from Bradley yet, but Pete only mailed it out on Saturday, so we'll see. Thanks for all your comments and critiques, I really appreciate you taking the time for that.

Rob

[millrat]

Nice job, MR. I like the tune!

Have you thought about recording the strummed guitar, then layer in the fingerpicking, and doing the vocals over the finished guitar tracks? Maybe strum the chorus together with two guitars?

Your recorded guitar sound is sweet!

Thanks for sharing that!
BK, thanks for the kind words. I definately need to add some dynamics to it, but haven't yet. I have got it in the hands of a few other people who are more talented than me with the musician end of it. I'm anxious to see what happens with it. If nothing else, it'll be something I can sing in church.
Thanks again for listening.

Rob