Awkward Fool.

[Reags]

A simpler song than I usually write. Void of any real narrative (something I dont do much). MAking a simple point.

Ideas? Feedback? I feel it may need more flesh...


Awkward Fool.

I’m just an awkward fool
I loose my page
I get lost in crowds
I get scared when I can’t see the sky

Don’t take me
Too seriously

I’m an awkward fool
I sing in the shower
I dance on my own
I’ll make time to spend doing nothing

Don’t take me
Too seriously

First impressions last
Too long for my liking
Like sight seeing
For personality

Don’t take me
Too seriously

[millrat]

There's a nice idea in there Reags, but it could use a little more meat, or flesh as you put it. Nice idea though.

[Melodic-Fate]

Like this line the best out of that


First impressions last
Too long for my liking
Like sight seeing
For personality

[Reags]

Like this line the best out of that


First impressions last
Too long for my liking
Like sight seeing
For personality

Thanks man, I like that one too. Probably gives away the most information as well.

[Reags]

OK, so I've made a very slight change.

The B section now reads:

First impressions last
Too long for my liking
Do you like sight seeing
For personality

I think that way the refrain line gains a bit more depth. As in, if you like sightseeing for personailty, you're a loser.