Red Silhouette

[KeyserSoze]

I wrote a song called Red Silhouette. Its part of a concept album I'm working on. The album is about a guy in love with a woman who's married to another dude. She's interested in his guy but would never break her marriage. So the guy does drugs to cope with his struggle, eventually goes insane, and a figure of his imagination convinces the guy to kill her. When he realizes what he's done, he commits suicide. This song is specifically about him taking drugs for the first time to deal with his emotions:

Stuck inside my mind
Seeking out a light
I'm fading into the darkness

Longing hopelessly
Needing a place to go
I'm Trapped and torn alone

Locked inside your mind
I'm lying here disguised
Fading into the darkness

Looking out the window
Tears falling from the sky
I've only this pill to cope

Blood sun of madness
Mark my skin in need
All sanity
falls before your eyes

Pain floods my veins
Waves of wrath exert
A red silhouette
The beast of death emerged

Edit: let me know what you guys think.