Nowhere is not my home

[Willie_G]

Hi, some text I've been mulling over for a little while. I have pretty much the whole song worked out, too bad I can sing, lol.

One more verse and one more variation on the chorus and I'm all set :)


(Verse I)

I pledge allegiance first
to our mother, Earth
she'll outlive your flags,
and your virgin births

And to the potential
for a Greater Good
through simple application
of Peace and Brotherhood

(chorus I)

And so I walk a frozen night
the Farmer's Fields alone
no visions, no goodbyes
Nowhere is not my home

Frozen nights alone
No visions, here at home

(Verse II)

I used to wrap myself
in three-colored cloth
bombs bursting in the air
drove the beat of my heart's song

But now I've travelled far enough
to breathe new atmosphere
happy now to live among
the truths I couldn't hear

(Chorus II)

So now I walk a Garden Path
it's right behind my home
barefeet mingling with the roots
and singing my first song

It's right behind my home
Thinking 'bout a new song

Responses?

[Furious Lopez]

"But now I've travelled far enough
to breathe new atmosphere
happy now to live among
the truths I couldn't hear"

That's a good quattrain. How come Nowhere is not my home is only in the song once?

[Mr.Excitement]

Poetry is very nice, but, I agree with Furious, Nowhere is My Home probably should appear more than once. Although, not necessarily so.

Jim

[Lazy Bee]

Spoken like a true citizen of the world. :) I'm not sure exactly what "Nowhere Is Not My Home" means.... but I like the suggestions and observations you're making. Come on man, if I can sing anyone can. Cut this and post it. :D I'd like to hear the melody.

[Willie_G]

Oh, gee, people actually read this thing, I'd forgotten all about it, thanks :-)

It doesn't really have a title, I just picked that line to represent it. I do have a melody for it now, and some more text, but not on this computer. My wife is probably going to take a stab at singing it, so we'll see what happens.

To get an idea of what I sound like when I sing, picture Jackie Gleason doing an impression of WC Fields singing Elvis songs while on a bender... That'll get you into the ballpark. Now, add a dash of tone-deafness, a jigger of lack-of-confidence, shake it all up in a silver beaker with about three pints of I-don't-want-to-sing and you'll come closer to the essence of my singing career than you probably want to.

I do enjoy writing, though, verruh much so :D

[Furious Lopez]

Oh, gee, people actually read this thing, I'd forgotten all about it, thanks :-)

It doesn't really have a title, I just picked that line to represent it. I do have a melody for it now, and some more text, but not on this computer. My wife is probably going to take a stab at singing it, so we'll see what happens.

To get an idea of what I sound like when I sing, picture Jackie Gleason doing an impression of WC Fields singing Elvis songs while on a bender... That'll get you into the ballpark. Now, add a dash of tone-deafness, a jigger of lack-of-confidence, shake it all up in a silver beaker with about three pints of I-don't-want-to-sing and you'll come closer to the essence of my singing career than you probably want to.

I do enjoy writing, though, verruh much so :D

Sounds like a song-writer's M.O. for sure!