Start again

[Reags]

Hey guys, I've just re-written a lyric I had for this song:
http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8225794

I wasnt quite happy so I've rewritten them which changes the song a bit. Which do you perfer, or think is better?

New Lyric:

He says he's got the world figured out
Reckons I should've had it down by now
Well I'm sorry man
I didnt think about no savings plan
I dont think I'll start again

He's got this girl he met online
Gonna meet her when he's got the time
But tonight it seems
theres only time for late night movies
I think I'd wanna start again

Are you your own mastermind?
Tell me bout you grand design
Oh the only thing I can say for sure
is that woud
leave me wanting more

Calls on the phone just for complaint
Life was easy back in '93
Well I gotta ask
Whatcha gonna do about it?
What dont you jsut start again?

So I guess I'm asking if you think its an improvement, or just your general thoughts. I'm gonna record a more decked out version with these new lyrics I think...

[Werman]

Wrong link ?

[Reags]

Ah yes. I changed the MP3 I had up for a new one:

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=880749&songID=8369218

I think the threads a bit dated now, I think he lyric has stuck.